為什么我的GRE作文只有3分?如何提高gre作文分?jǐn)?shù)
GRE寫作中國(guó)考生的平均得分只有3分左右并不算理想。而許多考生之所以拿不到作文高分,都是因?yàn)?a href='http://www.yishupeixun.net/yu/wenzhang/' target='_blank'>文章中存在各種寫法問(wèn)題而并非平時(shí)練習(xí)不夠積極認(rèn)真。那么哪些問(wèn)題更容易影響大家的作文成績(jī)呢?下面小編就為考生講解GRE寫作的常見(jiàn)扣分問(wèn)題并分享應(yīng)對(duì)方法。
為什么我的GRE作文只有3分?如何提高gre作文分?jǐn)?shù)
寫作速度偏慢導(dǎo)致文章篇幅不夠內(nèi)容有限
在新GRE作文中的另一個(gè)普遍問(wèn)題是寫作速度太慢,這顯然是因?yàn)樵诳荚嚽八鞯臏?zhǔn)備不夠充分。GRE考試的寫作除了開頭段和結(jié)尾段,中間一般應(yīng)該寫三段。但是考生在規(guī)定時(shí)間內(nèi)往往只能寫兩段,而且字?jǐn)?shù)也不夠,只能寫400字左右。GRE寫作雖然沒(méi)有字?jǐn)?shù)要求,但是一篇較好的、成熟的,能夠充分展示自己觀點(diǎn)的GRE作文,一般應(yīng)在600字左右,或者是600字以上。由此可見(jiàn),一篇400字左右的文章在內(nèi)容上是不夠充實(shí)的。
邏輯論證缺乏說(shuō)服力沒(méi)有可讀性
在闡述思想觀點(diǎn)之后,缺乏有力的例證去支持所闡述觀點(diǎn)?;蛘呖偸且妹總€(gè)人都耳熟能詳?shù)睦C,例如目前最流行的例證有兩個(gè)B和兩個(gè)E,兩個(gè)B即Bill Gates和Bill Clinton。兩個(gè)E即Einstein和Edison。并不是這些例證不恰當(dāng)或不足以說(shuō)明問(wèn)題,而是如果每一位GRE考試的考生都把愛(ài)迪生發(fā)明電燈作為例證,都引用愛(ài)因斯坦所說(shuō)的成功是百分之九十九的勤勞加上百分之一的天分,那么自己的文章就顯得平庸乏味,不吸引人。同時(shí),也說(shuō)明考生的知識(shí)面狹窄,視野不開闊。
對(duì)問(wèn)題的分析流于表面缺乏深度
在習(xí)作中沒(méi)有能夠表現(xiàn)出對(duì)題目的復(fù)雜性的理解,有時(shí)考生用簡(jiǎn)單應(yīng)對(duì)TOEFL作文的方法來(lái)對(duì)付新GRE作文,這是錯(cuò)誤的。例如,當(dāng)題目中的論述沒(méi)有明確說(shuō)明,但其中卻隱含由這種論述可能帶來(lái)的或可能產(chǎn)生的影響時(shí),即implications(隱含意義),往往在考生的作文中被忽略。還有,沒(méi)有對(duì)題目的statement進(jìn)行qualification,即:對(duì)原來(lái)的題目進(jìn)行分析,或者是縮小它的范圍。因?yàn)镚RE的題目往往是比較寬泛的,直接針對(duì)如此寬泛的題目寫作是非常困難的,所以必須在文章的第一段中對(duì)題目進(jìn)行整理。最后一個(gè)問(wèn)題是在闡述自己觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候,缺乏對(duì)對(duì)立觀點(diǎn)予以應(yīng)有程度的承認(rèn)。
作文結(jié)尾段重復(fù)度太高缺乏原創(chuàng)性
還有一個(gè)非常關(guān)鍵也是獲得高分至關(guān)重要的問(wèn)題是寫作最后一段時(shí)不應(yīng)該只是簡(jiǎn)單的重復(fù)第一段的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言。寫作最后一段應(yīng)該換一種說(shuō)法,應(yīng)該paraphrase第一段的要義。這點(diǎn)雖然與及格分?jǐn)?shù)不甚相關(guān),但是與GRE作文是否能獲得最高分?jǐn)?shù)息息相關(guān)。這個(gè)弱點(diǎn)往往是由于同學(xué)們非常缺乏寫作語(yǔ)匯(working vocabulary)所致。GRE考生大都是大學(xué)生,或是在校,或是即將畢業(yè),在閱讀方面的英文詞匯量大大超過(guò)了中學(xué)生,但在寫作詞匯上卻與中學(xué)生相差不多,這是在備考時(shí)需要解決的問(wèn)題。
如何解決上述新GRE作文問(wèn)題,小編給出以下幾條建議:
多準(zhǔn)備針對(duì)性素材提升論述說(shuō)服力
在備考過(guò)程中要多準(zhǔn)備例子,并把它們一一寫下來(lái),進(jìn)行分類。一個(gè)例子往往可以應(yīng)對(duì)好幾個(gè)同類的題目,這樣做是效率最高的辦法。
堅(jiān)持寫作練習(xí)克服畏難情緒
我們都害怕寫作文,想到要練習(xí)寫一整篇文章,往往就沒(méi)有了信心。其實(shí)我們可以從練習(xí)寫作開頭段,然后設(shè)計(jì)文章的提綱開始。寫開頭段能夠讓我們以輕松一點(diǎn)的心情著手GRE寫作的準(zhǔn)備,并且迅速了解所有的題目,因?yàn)镚RE的題目數(shù)量是固定的。
儲(chǔ)備積極詞匯,用時(shí)得心應(yīng)手。從備考的開始就要著手增加working vocabulary, 當(dāng)然也包含詞組,成語(yǔ)。平時(shí)背的詞匯往往只是看到它能知道其中文的某個(gè)翻譯意思,但是我們卻不能靈活運(yùn)用這些詞匯進(jìn)行表達(dá),更不用說(shuō)在短暫的GRE寫作考試時(shí)間內(nèi)用它們遣詞造句了。
GRE寫作滿分范文1
"Our?declining?environment?may?bring?the?people?of?the?world?together?as?no?politician,?philosopher,?or?war?ever?could.??Environmental?problems?are?global?in?scope?and?respect?no?nation's?boundaries.??Therefore,?people?are?faced?with?the?choice?of?unity?and?cooperation?on?the?one?hand?or?disunity?and?a?common?tragedy?on?the?other."??
Our?declining?environment?may?bring?the?people?of?the?world?together?as?no?politician,?philosopher,?or?war?ever?could.??Environmental?issues?are?a?growing?concern?in?our?country?today.??It?is?an?issue?that?concerns?every?person,?no?one?is?excluded.??
Facing?and?solving?environmental?issues?calls?for?unity?and?cooperation.??Prejudices?should?be?put?aside?in?this?time?of?need.??Without?unity?our?world?as?we?know?it?will?not?exist?in?twenty-five?years.??People?as?a?whole?need?to?take?action.??Without?unity?and?cooperation?little?will?be?accomplished.??
There?are?many?environmental?issues?we?are?facing?today.??For?example,?recycling?is?a?simple?and?effective?way?to?help?the?environment.??If?everyone?did?a?small?part?the?results?would?be?enormous.??Recycling?is?a?good?example?because?it?is?something?every?single?person?is?capable?of?doing.??
There?are?many?ways?people?of?any?age,?race,?or?sex?can?contribute?to?help?the?environment.??Emissions?testing?for?exhausts?on?automobiles?is?one?way?to?help?keep?unnecessary?pollutants?from?contaminating?the?air.??Very?few?cities?require?emissions?testing?for?automobiles.??Columbus,?for?example,?does?not?require?emissions?testing.??My?small?hometown?of?Amherst,?Ohio?does?require?this?test.??
I?believe?the?government?needs?to?implement?stricter?regulations?regarding?environmental?issues?and?also?increase?the?funding?that?is?allotted?for?it.??Mandatory?recycling?laws?with?a?stiff?penalty?for?breaking?the?law?is?one?solution.??Funding?for?groups?to?do?research?is?imperative.??Without?research?there?is?very?little?we?would?know?about?anything?including?diseases?and?microorganisms.??
People?of?the?world?need?to?understand?the?situation?our?generation?and?generations?to?come?are?faced with.??This?understanding?needs?to?come?from?education.??The?United?States?has?always?been?a?forerunner?in?wars,?peace?talks,?etc.??It?is?now?time?for?the?United?States?to?be?the?leader?in?solutions?to?environmental?concerns.??The?greatest?barrier?in?any?situation?is?communication.??If?we?communicate?with?each?other?and?work?together?instead?of?apart?results?would?be?seen.??Education?is?another?great?concern,?especially?in?underdeveloped?countries?and?third?world?nations.??There?is?a?lack?of?education?in?many?of?these?countries.??Education?is?the?key?to?success.??
In?summary?I?would?like?to?emphasize?the?importance?in?unity?and?cooperation?on?global?concerns?such?as?the?environment.??Also?education?is?very?important?in?making?headway.??I?also?believe?the?government?should?get?more?involved?in?these?issues.?Comments:?
This?paper?presents?and?supports?an?adequate?analysis?of?the?issue.??After?stating?the?need?for?cooperation?on?the?environment,?the?writer?proposes?several?very?specific?remedies?for?environmental?problems:?recycling,?emissions?testing,?research,?education,?and?communication.??The?detailed?description?of?emissions?testing?is?useful;?however,?the?other?remedies?(recycling,?research,?etc.)?are?not?developed?fully?or?persuasively.??
In?some?areas?the?response?suffers?from?needless?repetition.??Paragraph?six,?for?example,?moves?from?education?to?communication?and?back?to?education.??The?conclusion,?moreover,?adds?little,?merely?repeating?earlier?statements.??
The?control?of?grammar?and?usage?is?generally?competent,?but?the?sentences?tend?to?be?choppy.??Although?most?of?the?ideas?are?stated?clearly,?the?relationship?between?the?ideas?is?not?always?made?clear:?"Also?education?is?very?important?in?making?headway.??I?also?believe?the?government?should?get?more?involved?in?these?issues."
GRE寫作滿分范文2
"Our?declining?environment?may?bring?the?people?of?the?world?together?as?no?politician,?philosopher,?or?war?ever?could.??Environmental?problems?are?global?in?scope?and?respect?no?nation's?boundaries.??Therefore,?people?are?faced?with?the?choice?of?unity?and?cooperation?on?the?one?hand?or?disunity?and?a?common?tragedy?on?the?other."??
WORKING?TOGETHER?FOR?EACH?OTHER?AND?THE?ENVIRONMENT??
Our?Environment,?if?we?take?care?of?it,?it?will?take?care?of?us.??CFCs?destroying?the?ozone?layer,?hundreds?of?acres?of?the?rain?forest?being?destroyed?daily,?smog-infested?air?to?breathe,?global?warming,?world?population?increasing?at?an?exponential?rate,?these?are?but?a?few?of?the?things?that?we?need?to?not?only?think?about,?but?find?ways?to?deal?with?them.??We?are?not?given?this?world?by?our?ancestors?we?are?borrowing?it?from?our?children?and?our?children's?children.??We?spend?so?much?time?trying?to?fix?other?countries?problems,?when?we?should?be?incorporating?them?in?working?toward?solving?the?environmental?issues.??If?we?do?not?this?huge,?living?planet?will?eventually??become?a?lifeless?hunk?of?rock?floating?in?the?large?universe.?
There?are?many?ways?that?we?can?begin?to?work?on?these?problems.??First??decrease?the?amount?of?CFC?production?and?usage.??Second?save?the?rain?forests,?which?are?being?cut?down?to?make?farmland?that?is?not?properly?maintained.??In?a?few?years?this?farmland?becomes?infertile?and?more?land?is?needed;?thus?more?of?the?rain?forest?is?destroyed.?Educating?farmers?on?different?crops?that?will?replentish?the?soil?and?keep?it?fertile.??Third?develop?alterative?methods?of??power?other?than?fossil?fuels,?such?as?more?hydro-electric,solar,and?wind?generated.??The?increasing?population?is?going?to?require?more?food?production?as?well?as?other?needs.??We?need?to?be?willing?and?able?to?manage?our?resources?to?meet?these?needs.??If?we?work?together?we?can?accomplish?the?things?that?are?necessary?to?protect?the?Earth?and?our?future?on?it.?Comments:?
This?essay?presents?a?clear?position?on?the?issue?but?is?limited?in?its?development.??The?author?first?argues?that?everyone?needs?to?cooperate?to?solve?environmental?problems?and?then?lists?the?ways?in?which?"we?can?begin?to?work?on?these?problems":?lowering?CFC's,?saving?rain?forests,?developing?alternative?energy?sources,?and?increasing?food?production.??Although?the?proposed?solutions?are?clearly?relevant,?they?are?not?sufficiently?explained,?nor?is?the?topic's?claim?about?the?challenges?of?international?cooperation?adequately?addressed.??
The?overall?organizational?plan?is?adequate:?introduction,?list?of?solutions?("First?????Second?????Third????"),?and?a?conclusion.??Within?the?paper,?however,?the?ideas?are?not?always?organized?logically.??In?the?first?paragraph,?for?example,?the?sentence?about?"our?ancestors"?is?followed?abruptly?by?the?idea?that?we?need?to?work?with?other?nations.??The?writer?could?improve?this?response?by?clarifying?the?connection?between?ideas?and?by?explaining?these?ideas?in?more?depth.??
Sentence-structure?problems?(run-on?sentences,?fragments,?lack?of?parallelism)?appear?throughout?the?essay:?"We?are?not?given?this?world?by?our?ancestors?we?are????"??At?times,?the?sentence?structure?is?so?awkward?that?the?reader?is?somewhat?confused?about?the?writer's?intended?meaning:?for?example,?"incorporating?them?in?working."?
GRE寫作滿分范文3
"Our?declining?environment?may?bring?the?people?of?the?world?together?as?no?politician,?philosopher,?or?war?ever?could.??Environmental?problems?are?global?in?scope?and?respect?no?nation's?boundaries.??Therefore,?people?are?faced?with?the?choice?of?unity?and?cooperation?on?the?one?hand?or?disunity?and?a?common?tragedy?on?the?other."??
Environmental?problems?will?require?a?joint?efferct?amoung?people?to?solve,?however,?environmental?problems?may?not?cause?people?to?come?together.??Should?the?problems?continue?for?an?extended?period?of?time?before?any?effert?is?made?to?solve?them,?they?will?reach?a?point?of?no?return?no?matter?how?people?come?together?to?work?on?it.??When?this?happens?there?will?be?increased?shortage?in?our?natural?resouses.??As?supply?of?our?resouces?goes?down?and?demand?remains?the?same?or?goes?up?there?will?be?increased?presure?to?claim?what?resouces?remain.??So?instead?of?people?working?together?to?solve?the?problem,?they?will?be?fighting?for?what's?left?by?the?problem.??
To?solve?this,?people?need?to?come?together?before?the?problem?reaches?a?state?of?no?return.??This?may be?hard?to?do?since?the?effects?of?environmental?problems?are?not?yet?felt?by?a?large?degree?(if?felt?at?all)?by?everyone.??At?this?point?in?time?many?feel?it?is?not?there?problem?to?worry?about?since?it?does?not?immediatly?effect?them.??To?remidy?this?people?should?become?more?aware?of?their?current?environment.?Comments:?
This?response?is?seriously?flawed.??Its?strongest?feature?is?a?fairly?clear?position:??it?agrees?with?the?claim?that?environmental?problems?will?require?cooperation?and?presents?a?scenario?for?what?will?happen?if?there?is?no?cooperation?--?conflict?over?diminishing?resources.??However,?the?writer?offers?little?support?for?that?position.??Threatened?"resources"?and?the?"effects?of?environmental?problems"?are?mentioned?but?not?specified,?and?the?paper?provides?no?examples?of?how?people?might?"come?together"?to?address?the?problem?or?how?they?might?"become?more?aware?of?their?current?environment."??
Some?of?the?sentences?are?worded?clearly?("So?instead?of?people?working?together?"),?but?others?are?so?flawed?by?imprecise?word?choice?that?the?meaning?is?difficult?to?understand:??"t?yet?felt?by?a?large?degree?(if?felt?at?all)?by?everyone."??
Also,?run-on?sentences?(the?first?sentence,?for?example)?and?unclear?pronoun?references?add?to?the?confusion,?reinforcing?the?score?of?2.?
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